People nowodays tend to have children at older age.Do advantages outweigh disadvatages?

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in later years.
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its drawbacks.
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stable and experience less
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task achievement
For task achievement, ensure to answer the question directly and provide a balanced view if the question asks to discuss advantages and disadvantages or if it involves comparing perspectives. Expand your answer to cover all aspects fully.
coherence cohesion
Make sure your essay has a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. Use a variety of sentence structures and cohesive devices (e.g., furthermore, moreover, however) to link your ideas and paragraphs smoothly.
coherence cohesion
To improve coherence, plan your essay so each paragraph has one main idea supported by specific examples or reasons. Transition smoothly between these ideas to maintain a logical flow.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Financial stability
  • Emotionally stable
  • Established careers
  • Generational gap
  • Health risks
  • Societal pressure
  • Emotional stress
  • Quality of parenting
  • Secure upbringing
  • Wisdom and experience
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