Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both these views and giver your own opinion.

There are various ways to promote a
product
, one of which is advertising.
While
some
people
think that advertising is highly effective
to persuade
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customers
, I stand with those who feel that
this
method is less effective.
Advertisement
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can be created in several media,
such
as television (TV), radio, and street
banner
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banners
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, which may attract large
group
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groups
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of
people
. Research in psychology
founds
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that the more
people
see something, the more they like it. Advertising may be interesting for certain
customers
, especially if it has a great narrative.
However
,
personalization
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the personalization
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aspect is missing from
this
type of marketing activity.
For instance
, a telecommunication
company
uses TV
advertisement
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advertisements
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to promote its fiber broadband
product
which
have
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multiple specifications. Though
this
create
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awareness of what
this
company
offers, for some
people
,
this
may not be appealing as it is unclear which
product
specification will be the most suitable for them.
On the other hand
, there are many available channels with better effectiveness than advertisement,
such
as email and sales force.
For example
, a
company
may hire
salesperson
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and ask them to offer products tailored to the
customers'
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customer's
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background or
behavior
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.
This
approach is more personalized and may create
better
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attachment with
customers
,
thus
encourage
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them to make purchases.
Besides
these paid channels, companies may
also
benefitted
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from existing
customers
' reviews.
A research
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suggests that one of the most crucial factors in buying
decision
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is customer reviews.
Therefore
, excellent
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opinions
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from existing
customers
contribute significantly
in
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persuading other
people
to buy a
product
. In conclusion, advertising may be successful at persuading
people
, but not as impactful as other available channels. I believe that if a
company
wants to attract
people
to buy their products, they should use a personalized approach and maintain excellent reviews so that
people
will be more convinced to make their purchases.
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task response
Ensure your introduction clearly outlines the views you'll discuss and your own stance. Clarify your thesis statement for stronger direction.
coherence and cohesion
Use a wider variety of cohesive devices and transition phrases for smoother progression between ideas and sections. Examples include 'Furthermore,', 'In contrast,', and 'As a result, '.
task response
Your conclusion can be strengthened by succinctly restating your viewpoint and the reasons behind it, providing a more definitive closure.
coherence and cohesion
Incorporate direct comparisons between the views to enhance the analysis, rather than discussing them in isolation. This approach can deepen the discussion and provide a more nuanced understanding of the topic.

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