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The maps below show the changes that took place at the seaside resort of Templeton between 2000 and 2013. summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show the changes that took place at the seaside resort of Templeton between 2000 and 2013. summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given maps illustrate the dramatic developments that took place at the seaside resort of Templeton over 13 years. In 2000, there was a large number of residential areas and houses compared to 2013. That means
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 a supermarket and other apartments were built by the local people along the
river side
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riverside
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 in 2013.
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, riding
ferry
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a ferry
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 in the sea became popular among the community
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 there was no water sports service in 2000. In 2013, the railway station was noticeably built up along the blue sea and that was one of the remarkable changes in the resort. In the north corner, there was a great number of households
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sprung up along the railway.
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, woodland was cleared to build a factory to get revenue for the residents. One of the significant developments was having an airport in 2013 compared to
previous
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the previous
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 thirteen years.
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comprising
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the two maps
shows
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 that the environment has changed from being rural to
urban
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an urban
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 area.

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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • seaside resort
  • infrastructure improvements
  • tourist facilities
  • leisure areas
  • environmental impact
  • coastal line
  • green spaces
  • economic boom
  • sustainable development
  • urbanization
  • recreational activities
  • conservation efforts
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