The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparision where relevant

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparision where relevant
The given representation illustrates the city hospital's accessibility
rout
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route
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, in two particular
year
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years
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. At
first
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first,
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glance is
evidant
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evident
evidence
that a number of facilités
are
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were
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added
while
some parts
remained
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remain
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unchange
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unchanged
, some others Parking and ... are changed. Regarding
initial
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the initial
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map,
hospital
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the hospital
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road
was
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lead
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led
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patients straight forward to
hospital
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the hospital
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from
city
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the city
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road
.
Nevertheless
, as the location remained stable, the function and amount of accessibility
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had
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changed through
examined
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the examined
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years.
Firstly
, at
junction
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the junction
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of
city
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the city
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road
and Hospital
road
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road,
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a roundabout
had
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was
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built
as well as
the junction of the ring
road
and hospital
road
to increase the Sight of drivers.
Secondly
, the number of bus
stop
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stops
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had
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has
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increased.
Moreover
, A bus station
had
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was
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built on the left side of Hospital
road
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Road
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and its routes reached
to
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both roundabouts.
thirdly
, as car park locution had not bee change. the function had been Made unique just for
staffs
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staff
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.
Although
, the Public Car park had moved to the
estern
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eastern
western
side of Ring
road
.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words road with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.

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