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The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1978 and 2003.

The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1978 and 2003.
The line graph displays the number of
grams
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 per
person
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 per
week
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 that a European nation consumed four different kinds of meats from 1979 to 2004.
Overall
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,
consumption
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 of
chicken
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 increased dramatically over the entire time period,
while
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 the
consumption
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 of
beef
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, lamb and fish decreased in the given course. At the beginning of the time,
beef
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 was the most-eaten meat with about 220
grams
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 per
person
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 per
week
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. After that, regardless of fluctuation, the amount of
beef
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 eaten every
week
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 by a
person
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 continued to dip and stood at 110
grams
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 per
week
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at the end
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 of the season. The second most bought meat in 1979 was
chicken
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 with just below 150
grams
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 per
person
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 per
week
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.
In contrast
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 to
beef
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,
chicken
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 has become quite popular throughout the given period. There was a steady surge in the
consumption
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 of
chicken
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, reaching almost 250
grams
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 of
chicken
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 per
week
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 per
person
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. A downfall has
also
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 been seen in the eating of lamb. In 1979 150
grams
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 of lamb was consumed by each individual per
week
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.
This
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 number continued to drop by the end of the time duration to 60
grams
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 per
person
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 per
week
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.
However
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, fish
consumption
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 remained relatively stable throughout the entire timeframe.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words grams, person, week, consumption, chicken, beef with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • fish
  • meat
  • poultry
  • beef
  • lamb
  • trend
  • increase
  • decrease
  • gradual
  • significant
  • fluctuate
  • peak
  • trough
  • steady
  • correlation
  • period
  • data
  • comparison
  • predominant
  • kilograms per capita
  • dietary habits
  • health consciousness
  • sustainability
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