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The bar chart shows the number of hours worked per week by men an women in Australia

The bar chart shows the number of hours worked per week by men an women in Australia
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The bar chart illustrates how many
hours
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 males and females are utilised for their
career
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careers
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 in Australia.Units are measured in percentages.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 Australian
men
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 spent more
hours
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 occupying a
week
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 compared to
women
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.Both
genders
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 spend 30-50
hours
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 a
week
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 in jobs, with their most.
Whereas
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 equally consumed time over 80
hours
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 for a small proportion of
genders
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 to gain money.
To begin
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 with, less than a fifth of
women
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 have a
job
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 with 0-10
hours
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,
while
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 the lowest percentage of
men
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 have the same
job
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 condition.
Similarly
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,in the 10-20
hours
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 of
work
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, with over 20 percentages and around 12 percentages for females and males respectively.
On the Other hand
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 , the situation change
in contrast
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,when these
genders
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 have 30-50
hours
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 of
work
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.In
this
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 stage , over two-fifths of
Men
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 are working per
week
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, almost 8% more than
women
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 with approximately 35%. Both
genders
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 spend the most time in
this
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 type of
work
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.
Although
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 the male population is again greater than female in
job
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 conditions with 60-80
hours
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 a
week
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.
However
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, the total percentage dropped gradually for both of them.
Men
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's duration of
work
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 is 30%
while
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women
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 spend about 18% in
this
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 situation.
Moreover
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, one in ten males and females in Australia are in their
job
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 over 80
hours
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 per
week
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, men, week, women, genders, job, work with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 5 times.
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