The graph below shows the number of trips made by children in one country to travel to and from school in 1990 and 2010 using various modes of transport. Summarise theinformation by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisonswhere relevant. Travel to and from school by children aged 5-12

The graph below shows the number of trips made by children in one country to travel

to and from school in 1990 and 2010 using various modes of transport. Summarise theinformation by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisonswhere relevant.

Travel to and from school by children aged 5-12
The bar graph compares the total
numbers
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number
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of trips made by
people
under 18 to go to and back from schools in a specific country.
Overall
, more
people
walked to their education place rather than using other transport types in 1990. In 2010 the most common way for
this
was being
a
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automobile
passanger
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passenger
. Being a car
passanger
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passenger
was the rarest type of transportation in 1990 and
this
became the most preferred in 2010, with just over 4
million
people
and around 11
million
people
, respectively. The number of
people
who walked to their school was just above 12
million
in 1990 and
this
number was nearly half that of in 2010. Cycling was the third most-used way to commute to educational places
and
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back in 1990, and
this
changed into being the least in 2010. The number of
people
who both walked and used
bus
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the bus
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in 1990 was just under 6
million
and
this
transformed into just under 4
million
in 2010. There was a little difference between the usage of buses in 1990 and 2010 with around 2
million
people
and
this
was the second most-used and third in 1990 and 2010, respectively.
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