The chart below shows global sales of the top five mobile phone brands between 2009 and 2013. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The chart below shows global sales of the top five mobile phone brands between 2009 and 2013.

Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words.
the graph
depict
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depicts
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the
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apply
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information about the
mobile's
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mobiles
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which were sold by
top
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the top
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five favourite brands of cellphones, over
an five
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a five-year
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years
of period, from 2009 to 2013 After the analysis, it is clearly stated that in the year
of
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2009
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2009,
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nokia
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Nokia
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had the highest selling units almost 400
millions
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million
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and after having a small dip,
this
figure rock bottom to 250
million
in revenue in 2013.
moreover
,
samsung
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Samsung
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saw an increasing
trend
close
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of close
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to 250
million
and
this
trend
went
upto
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up to
four
years
straight reaching
to
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400
million
profit from
seeling
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selling
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smarphone
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smartphone
.
however
, ZTE did not show much of
profit
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a profit
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trend
and remained
steadily
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steady
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throughout
thoughout
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throughout
the five
years
furthermore
, a small
riverly
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river
rivalry
between
apple
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Apple
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and LG
were
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was
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seen there. at the start of the year,
apple
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the apple
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did not show much of
trend
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a trend
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but the figure saw
upward
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an upward
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trend
(100
million
) after two
years
and
this
figure skyrocketed to almost
150million
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150 million
in total.
on the other hand
, close to
hundred
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a hundred
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million
in
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apply
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units were sold by LG but in 2011, the downward
trend
had
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apply
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started and the same
very
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apply
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trend
happened after another two
years
overall
, it is clearly manifested that
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Nokia
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nokia
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Nokia
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and
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Samsung
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samsung
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Samsung
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were
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apply
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had the
million
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millions
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of users
at
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apply
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each
years
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year
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but for
apple
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Apple
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and LG a fluctuation
had been
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was
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seen throughout the period
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Vocabulary: Replace the words years, million, trend with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 7 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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