Many people argue that restaurants should be required to disclose the nutritional information of the dishes they serve. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages? You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write at least 250 words.

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food
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information
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food
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of it clearly overshadow its drawbacks. From a negative perspective,
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a few obstacles for
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and
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owner
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misunderstanding
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and expenses are some
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. Regarding lack of understanding, all people do not have enough education to analyze provided
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many elder people
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this
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a
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huge pressure on company of
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them
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without any refund. Turning to
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view,
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knowledge can obtain a variety of merits which control on
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to check their
food
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factor of obesity in society. On
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hand, because of
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details,
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firm
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of
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providing and selling cuisine try to present the best type of initial material, manner of cooking, and way of maintenance in their dishes. It can be supposed to be one of
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element
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of raising
quality
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of cuisines. What has been discussed can be summarized as follows that despite that fact some problem may happen if all information of dishes
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out, but the benefit of
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the bad sides and it is rational to accept
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more investigation in the future.
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structure
Your essay presents a structured argument, but lacks a clear roadmap in the introduction. Consider explicitly stating the advantages and disadvantages you will discuss to guide the reader more effectively.
Clear paragraphs
Make sure each paragraph has a clear main idea and that all sentences within the paragraph closely support that idea. Some paragraphs mix benefits and drawbacks, which can confuse readers.
task response
You've tackled the topic, but to achieve a higher grade, ensure your response fully addresses all parts of the task. This includes giving equal weight to both sides of the argument before presenting a reasoned conclusion.
examples
Use more specific examples to support your arguments. General statements are less convincing than detailed, specific illustrations of your points.
grammar and vocabulary
Work on improving the accuracy and range of your grammar and vocabulary. This will help in clearly conveying your arguments and in achieving a higher coherence and cohesion score.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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