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Many people no longer read newspapers or watch TV news programmes. Instead, they get news about the world from the Internet. Why is it so? Is this a positive or negative development? You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write at least 250 words.

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In the present climate,
Internet
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 has been recently
one
 of the important minefields. Replacing
internet
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the internet
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 with common media as a source of
news
 can be a new tendency among people
which
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user
friendly
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 features and
accessibilities
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 are reasons of I strongly approve merit of using
Internet
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 in
this
 way. Many causes may be considered to show
interest
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 of societies. The most significant of them is convenience.
One
, regardless of age and gender, is able to use
this
 world
web
. So
this
 can help enhance daily routines in modern
life style
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. On top of that, every
one
 access to
web
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the web
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 equally. Individual consumes different
type
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types
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 of wireless and cable-based
web
 anytime and anywhere
some
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they
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 want
which
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and
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 users in the beyond of seas are
perfect
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a perfect
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example
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. It leads to
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 consumers around the world. Shifting to positive or negative sides,
Internet
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 can have a number of benefits.
First
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 interesting side of
upward
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the upward
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 trend of
web
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 might be
improve
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 the knowledge of people more instantly than traditional media.
News
 spreads over the world immediately and every community
obtains
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 aware of their essential information.
This
 fact has a massive impression on nations. Another benefit can be variation sources that trick and fake data have not any effect on some. Even the ordinary are able to
sure
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 about
news
 and sciences.
This
side
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site
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 has increased clients who trust
this
 technology. What has been discussed could be summarized as follows
that
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apply
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turning method of getting
news
, because of easy usage and high access to
web
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 can convenience many
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one
, including me,
it
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 is beneficial.
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