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The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040.

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040.
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The presented line graph indicates information about the number of US
households
 by annual revenue from 2007 to 2011 and 2015. The unit measurement is in millions.
Overall
, it can be seen that people who earned 100k USD or more experienced the most fluctuation rather than
rest
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the rest
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 of them. Moving to more
detailed
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, it is considerable that families who earned between 25k and 49k dollars had a small gap in these periods with families who earned 25,000 dollars or below. Both of these charts
has
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 stayed between 25-30
million
 during these 3 periods and both of their pick levels were in 2011.
According to
 the demonstrated information,
population
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the population
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 of families with 50,000 to 74.999 USD has steadily stayed
on
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at
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 20
million
.
Whereas
,
number
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the number
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 of
households
 with 75,000 to 99,999 USD has slightly fluctuated from 2007 to 2015.
Population
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The population
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 of
households
 with the highest revenue increased from 28
million
 in 2007 to 33
million
. As you can see, the highest amount of
households
belongs
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 to these people who can earn much more than
rest
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the rest
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 of them.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words households, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • graph
  • percentage
  • population
  • Asian countries
  • living in cities
  • 1970
  • 2020
  • predictions
  • 2030
  • 2040
  • introduction
  • overview
  • trend
  • body paragraph
  • compare
  • predicted percentages
  • summarize
  • closing statement
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