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Band 4.5

A friend of yours is thinking about applying for the same course that you did at university. He/She has asked for your advice about studying this subject. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter, give details of the course you took at the university explain why you recommend the university give some advice about how to apply

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Dear John, I am writing to express my opinion about the
course
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I have
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this days
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this day
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.
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,
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 I am good at all subjects of university's classes, my powerful interests
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to
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 attend
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a mathematic
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mathematic
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course
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of
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 excellent
professor
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's
lesson
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. Most
of
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the
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things are connected with maths and everything
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this
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 important subject of the world. Because
,
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this
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 one has
main
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 role of every work. So, I want to improve my maths skills for doing every
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 well.
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course
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's price is
little
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 bit expensive, because of
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reliable lessons. And
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professor
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the professor
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 gives you free and special books for
learn
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 every part of
topics
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.
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,
this
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course
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 is placed in
huge
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 and comfortable room of
university
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. The most
satisfied
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 part is you don't need to waste your time on
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, you can brush up every day in
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 extra room with
group
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 of intelligent pupils often lectures or university lessons. And
professor
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 always separates time for every student who is
find
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a
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difficulties
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 learning new
informations
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information
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. If you want to join
this
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course
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, you should contact with
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's administrator. Because he
is
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 not
any
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 time for
works
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 like
this
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. And you don't need worried about quality of
course
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. Because
teacher
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 always tough topics by using modern techniques. I believe that all
informations
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 - set perfectly matches your requirement and I look forward
your
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Your
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 sincerely , Nozigul
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coherence cohesion
Improve the logical structure by clearly organizing ideas into distinct paragraphs with one main idea each, and use transitional words or phrases to improve the flow of your text.
coherence cohesion
Ensure a clear greeting and closing to maintain the format of a letter, which you have done well. Consider adding a date and more personalized closing remarks for a natural touch.
task achievement
Clarify and expand on details of the course including specific aspects you found beneficial, how it impacted you, and why this might also benefit your friend. This helps in fully responding to the task's requirements.
task achievement
Maintain a consistent, suitable writing tone throughout your letter. A more formal tone is typically expected in this kind of correspondence, avoiding contractions ('I am' instead of 'I'm') and ensuring proper punctuation and capitalization.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • prospective student
  • alma mater
  • curriculum
  • faculty
  • state-of-the-art
  • extramural
  • scholarly pursuits
  • cohort
  • accreditations
  • holistic development
  • pedagogy
  • thesis
  • dissertation
  • prerequisites
  • mentorship
  • application portal
  • tuition fees
  • scholarships
  • financial aid
  • internship opportunities
  • networking events
  • career services
  • personal statement
  • deadline
  • admissions office
  • recommendation letters
  • portfolio
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