The charts below give information on the ages of the population of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below give information on the ages of the population of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The
given
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pie chart
illustrate
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illustrates
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information about the population
in
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of
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different ages in two countries starting from 2000 and ending with the prediction for 2050.
Overall
, it can clearly be seen that the highest age
percentage
in most of the
years
in both countries was from 15-59
years
.
According to
what is shown, the largest
proportion
in
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of
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Yemen
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Yemen's
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population in 2000 was
people
from 0-14
years
with 50.1%.
However
, in Italy it is the opposite, the
percentage
of
people
who are from 15-59 is the highest
of
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at
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61.6%, and the lowest rate was for
peopel
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people
who are under that age. Looking closely
to
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at
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the figures, the
proportion
in Yemen changed a lot after 50
years
.
Firstly
, the
percentage
of
people
from 0-14 and from 15-59
years
was approximately the same, but in 2050 the
percentage
of
people
who are from 15-59
years
increased to 57.3%.
Although
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,
people
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for people
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who are
from
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apply
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60+
years
the
proportion
of it did
no
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not
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changed
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dramatically, there is just around 2% change.
While in
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In
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Italy the rate of
people
who are 60+
years
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old become
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become
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became
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the second highest
percentage
and
rise
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rose
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substantially after 5 decades with 42.3%.
Moreover
, the
proportion
of
people
who are under 15 is roughly the same, but
people
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the people
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who are from 15 and under
than
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apply
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60
years
decreased to 46.2%
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, years, proportion, people with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 4 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • age distribution
  • population demographics
  • projected
  • projections
  • notable changes
  • demographic changes
  • implications
  • birth rates
  • life expectancy
  • senior citizens
  • young population
  • working-age population
  • dependency ratio
  • aging population
  • socio-economic impact
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