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The chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The tables shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.

The chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The tables shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.
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The bar chart gives information about the number of a country’s
exports
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 divided into different categories, in the years 2016 and 2015. The other
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chart compares the proportion change in all assemblages of
exports
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 in 2016 with 2015.
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, it can be seen that
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 the highest value of
exports
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 belonged to petroleum
products
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 in both mentioned years.
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, textiles had the highest percentage change among the other groups. Looking at the details, the figure for petroleum
products
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 was higher than other groups at just above 60
billions
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 in 2015.
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, the number of
exports
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 peaked at approximately 63 in 2016 for petroleum
products
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. The rate for Engineered goods, gems and jewellery, agricultural
products
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 and textiles was
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 57, 43, 31 and 25, respectively in 2015. Turning to the table, all the categories witnessed an upward trend in the value of
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,
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except
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 for engineered goods, which levelled off by around 5.18%.
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, it is noticeable that textiles had a significant rising trend
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 15.24%,
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 agriculture
products
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 saw a negligible rise
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 0.81%, in a term of one year.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in addition".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words exports, products with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gives" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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