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Many people today are worried about the large quantities of waste produced by ordinary households.

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In the
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 two decades, the whole world has been worried about the large quantities of
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 produced by households, especially in crowded cities. One of the main problems is cause pollution of the environment, landfilling in urban areas and fertile areas not only makes the area unhabitable but
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 causes the loss of soil for agriculture.
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 means in the near future, it will have a very bad effect on people`s lives. Increasing the
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 causes an increase in the costs of recycling . in
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 situation, the poor and crowded countries cannot afford the costs of recycling and
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 causes more
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. Fortunately, there are a lot of solutions to the
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 problem . One of them is to increase the knowledge of every person in every society to save the planet from
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 big issue by producing less
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 . Another one is that the government should set heavy fines for people who produce a lot of
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 to stop the production of a lot of
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 and
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 all of the government have to set more funds for recycling to recycle every
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 that people produce.
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 the production of large quantities of
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 is a very big problem , with public knowledge and the help of the governments, we can easily solve
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 problem .
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