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You had a dinner with your friend’s family. Write a letter to your friend and express your fillings about the dinner. In your letter, you should include: Say what you enjoyed at the dinner Describe how you feel about his/her family Invite your friend and his family to your place

#dinner #friend’s #friend #fillings #place
Dear Jennifer , I'm writing
this
 to let you know that I felt wonderful at your house dinner party and my
kidz
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kids
 enjoyed all the delicious
meal
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meals
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 you made yesterday . Well ,
lets
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let's
let us
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 start
from
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with
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 all our favourite indian
starter
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starters
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"panni puri" and my kidz never remove their hands from chilli chicken which is
thr
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the
 main dish of our dinner party . All the food from
starter
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the starter
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 to the main course is spectacular without any doubt .
Also
 , I like the way your daughter
take
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takes
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 care of my little
kidz
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kids
 and never
get
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gets
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 bored with them . Well , your husband
keep
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keeps
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 the laughter all around and
make
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makes
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 us comfortable every time . It was amazing
get
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to get
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 together and definitely
bring
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brought
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 our relationship
more
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apply
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close
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closer
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. Would you like to come
at
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to
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 my place next weekend ? I'd organize
pizza
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a pizza
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 party with cocktails and
also
 play little games to make it more interesting .
Lets
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Let
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,
take
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's take
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rain
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a rain
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 check and enjoy another weekend on Saturday around 8 pm . See you soon All the best , Roop
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General Writing
Make sure to proofread your letter to correct any spelling or grammar errors. For example, 'kidz' should be 'kids', and 'panni puri' should be 'pani puri'. Accurate spelling is important for clarity and professionalism.
Coherence and Cohesion
Your letter could benefit from more structured paragraphs. Try to organize your ideas more clearly - one paragraph for what you enjoyed at the dinner, another to describe how you feel about the family, and a final one for the invitation. This would greatly improve the logical flow of your letter.
Task Achievement
Expand on your feelings and experiences a bit more for a full task response. While you mention enjoying the dinner and liking how the family interacted with your kids, adding more detail on why these experiences were enjoyable or meaningful could deepen the reader's understanding of your perspective.
Task Achievement
Consider adjusting the tone in some parts of your letter to make it more uniformly friendly and inviting. Although your tone is mostly suitable, ensuring consistency would enhance the overall feel of the letter and make it more engaging for your friend.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • heartwarming experience
  • culinary delights
  • familial warmth
  • cordial atmosphere
  • intriguing conversations
  • reciprocal invitation
  • cultural exchange
  • personable interactions
  • memorable hospitality
  • fostering connections
  • warm welcome
  • thoughtful gestures
  • engaging discussions
  • positive impact
  • strengthen the bond
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