You have seen an advertisement from a couple, who live in australia, for someone to teach their two children your language for a year. Write a letter to the couple, In your letter -explain why you think you would be suitable for the job -Say what else you could do for the family -give your reasons for wanting the job

Dear Mrs Bhatra, I am writing
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letter to apply
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job
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the job
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advertised about
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apply
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teaching your children
mother
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the mother
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language . I think
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am
perfect
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candidate for
this
job because
i
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already have
the
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experience
of teaching
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the punjabi
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punjabi
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language to foreign
kid
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and
i
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can provide you reference as well .
Beside
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this
,
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have 5 years
professional
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experience
as
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a punjabi
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punjabi
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teacher in the school
as well as
two
year
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experience
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of experience
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as
early
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childhood teacher .You can visit my website and read the reviews from my clients in your free time. As I know , parents
busy
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at work most of the time and hard for you
leave
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your
kids
at home alone . I can take of your
kids
as well
while
provide
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tutoring to them . If you would like to share
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plan of your family so
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can make meals for your
kids
and
also
take them for
walk
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if you feel safe to do so. I want
this
job because
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want to open my
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school in
next
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two years .
Therefore
,
this
will help me to foster my
experience
and provide me
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opportunity to improve my teaching skills . I attached my resume with the letter again and
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hope
i
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will
recieve
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receive
call
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from you soon. Yours faithfully, Roopkamal Kaur
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Task Response
To improve your Task Response, ensure that your letter fully answers all parts of the prompt. While you have addressed the points, elaborating more on why you want the job and providing more specific examples of your previous experience could strengthen your response.
Coherence and Cohesion
For Coherence and Cohesion, consider using a variety of linking words and transitions to connect your ideas more smoothly. While your letter has a clear structure, better transitions between paragraphs and sentences would enhance readability and flow.
Greeting and Closing
In terms of Greeting and Closing, you’ve done well by using a polite and appropriate greeting and closing. To refine further, ensure the entire letter maintains a consistent level of formality.
Single Idea per Paragraph
To improve the single idea per paragraph criterion, make sure each paragraph focuses on a single topic or idea. This will make your writing clearer and more organized. Your letter somewhat achieves this, but clearer topic sentences could enhance each paragraph’s focus.
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