You have seen an advertisement from a couple, who live in australia, for someone to teach their two children your language for a year. Write a letter to the couple, In your letter -explain why you think you would be suitable for the job -Say what else you could do for the family -give your reasons for wanting the job
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Dear Mrs Bhatra,
I am writing
this
letter to apply on
Change preposition
for
job
advertised about Correct article usage
the job
the
teaching your children Correct article usage
apply
mother
language . I think Correct article usage
the mother
i
am Change the capitalization
I
perfect
candidate for Add an article
the perfect
a perfect
this
job because i
already have Change the capitalization
I
the
Correct article usage
apply
experience
of teaching Correct article usage
the punjabi
punjabi
language to foreign Change the capitalization
Punjabi
kid
and Fix the agreement mistake
kids
i
can provide you reference as well . Change the capitalization
I
Beside
Correct your spelling
Besides
this
, i
have 5 years Change the capitalization
I
professional
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of professional
experience
as Correct article usage
a punjabi
punjabi
teacher in the school Change the capitalization
Punjabi
as well as
two year
Fix the agreement mistake
years
experience
as Change preposition
of experience
early
childhood teacher .You can visit my website and read the reviews from my clients in your free time.
As I know , parents Correct article usage
an early
busy
at work most of the time and hard for you Add a missing verb
are busy
leave
your Fix the infinitive
to leave
kids
at home alone . I can take of your kids
as well while
provide
tutoring to them . If you would like to share Change the verb form
providing
meal
plan of your family so Correct article usage
the meal
i
can make meals for your Change the capitalization
I
kids
and also
take them for walk
if you feel safe to do so.
I want Add an article
a walk
this
job because i
want to open my Change the capitalization
I
kids
school in Change to a genitive case
kid's
kids'
next
two years . Correct article usage
the next
Therefore
, this
will help me to foster my experience
and provide me the
opportunity to improve my teaching skills . I attached my resume with the letter again and Add the preposition
with the
i
hope Change the capitalization
I
i
will Change the capitalization
I
recieve
Correct your spelling
receive
call
from you soon.
Yours faithfully,
Roopkamal KaurAdd an article
a call
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Task Response
To improve your Task Response, ensure that your letter fully answers all parts of the prompt. While you have addressed the points, elaborating more on why you want the job and providing more specific examples of your previous experience could strengthen your response.
Coherence and Cohesion
For Coherence and Cohesion, consider using a variety of linking words and transitions to connect your ideas more smoothly. While your letter has a clear structure, better transitions between paragraphs and sentences would enhance readability and flow.
Greeting and Closing
In terms of Greeting and Closing, you’ve done well by using a polite and appropriate greeting and closing. To refine further, ensure the entire letter maintains a consistent level of formality.
Single Idea per Paragraph
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