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“Libraries are irrelevant in the age of the internet and should not be publicly funded.” Do you agree or disagree?

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The statement that
libraries
 are irrelevant in the age of the internet and should not be publicly funded is a statement that I
complelety
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completely
 disagree with.
Libraries
 are a great source of
knowlegde
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knowledge
 that can be accessed by the public and definitely should remain
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 funded as they are made for our use. students from schools, colleges and universities come into public
libraries
 for a quiet place to study, a place where they can use the
knowlegde avaible
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knowledge available
 at their
fingertipos
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fingertips
 to help them write their assignments, use as
refernce
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reference
 in their assignments or just to read fictional
books
 that may be too expensive to buy.
libraries
 are the reason all types of
books
, fictional, non-fictional and more are
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accessible
 to all types of people for free. which allows for no discrimination to be made.
further
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 it is a great tourist attraction as
libraries
 in each city, each country
are
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beautifuoly
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beautifully
 decorated or housed in
a
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an
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 old
hertaige
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heritage
 building which allows for them to become a great photo spot.
However
while
 I do agree that the internet allows for easy access
of
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to
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 information, it is not always accurate
of
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or
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 a reliable source of information
where as
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whereas
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 the information found in
books
 at the
libraries
are
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is
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 always fact-checked and can be referenced without the fear of it being wrong.
to conclude
,
libraries
is
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are
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 a place that houses immense
knowlegde
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knowledge
 about the world, the city we live in, the history of our lands and the history of
this
 world,
books
 of love, crime, fiction, non-fictional, news articles, journals and more, it is a hard copy truth which will
forevr
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forever
 remain, and
therefore
libraries
 are certainly not irrelevant.
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coherence cohesion
Ensure to have a clearly structured introduction, providing a brief outline of your argument structure. This will enhance the logical flow and make your stance clearer from the beginning.
coherence cohesion
Use paragraphs effectively to separate distinct ideas. Each paragraph should have a clear main idea, supported with examples or evidence, followed by a small conclusion linking back to the main question.
task achievement
In terms of task achievement, make sure that every point you make is directly answering the question posed. Avoid diverting into areas that do not directly support your stance on the relevance and funding of libraries.
task achievement
Incorporate a wider range of examples and evidence to support your points. This could include statistics, studies, or real-life examples that further solidify your argument against the notion that libraries are irrelevant.
coherence cohesion
Work on refining your conclusion to not only restate your main points but also to succinctly summarize why the evidence you've presented supports your stance. This helps to reinforce your argument and leaves a strong impression on the reader.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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