The bar chart shows the participation of children in selected leisure activities in Australia.
The information about the number of teenagers who
take
participate in five different kinds of leisure activities is depicted by a given bar chart. The data has been calibrated in percentage.
Verb problem
apply
To sum up
, it can be vividly manifested that the highest proportion is attributed to watching tv and videos, while
rolle
blading represents the lowest point.
At first glance at the chart, it is evident that a slight discrepancy is seen between the percentile of young men and young women in rolle blading which is 40% and 35%, Correct your spelling
roller
correspondingly
. Rephrase
respectively
Further
analysis reveals that the ratio of boys
who get involve
in bike riding is higher than Change the form of the verb
involved
the
Correct determiner usage
that
girls
, the former Change preposition
of girls
one
is almost 65% and the latter is about 50%.
Moving to the next information, the ratio of 5 to Correct pronoun usage
apply
14 year old
Add a hyphen
14-year-old
boys
and girls
who watch tv
and videos is apparent sameCorrect your spelling
TV
Verb problem
,
that is
accounted
Wrong verb form
accounting
99
%. Probing ahead, the Change preposition
for 99
boys
play more electronic and computer games rather than the girls
which stands at 79% and 61%, respectively. Hence forward
, a considerable difference is noticed in the number of Correct your spelling
Henceforward
boys
and girls
who engage in art and craft activity.Submitted by real.nawa on
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