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nformation technology is changing many aspects of our lives and now dominates our home, leisure and work activities. To what extent do the benifits of IT outweigh the disadvantages.

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IT
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 has become more of a
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through
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 recent times. Many might believe that we are losing our path by relying too hard on technology,
While
 others believe
this
 is our path of redemption. I believe the positives
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completely
outweighs
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 the negatives, But I will discuss both sides. IT advancements have
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 to a lot of time
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 throughout our lives. In older days it might have
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 you weeks to send a letter to your destination. Now it would take mere seconds to achieve the same thing with even better results. It might have taken you months to gather data about a specific topic before and now it takes no more than a few minutes to ask artificial
inteligence
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 to get even more than you previously desired. That being said,
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 us relying more and more on technological advancements.
As a result
, IT has made us more lazy. When you can ask AI any question, Why would one even try to solve any problem by themselves? When you can do cross-continental things together,
Then
 why would one decide to get
together with
 their friends? These little things would make us weaker and in the long run, lethargic. All in all,
While
 there are some issues with the
further
 development of information technology, These are rudimentary problems and can be solved with little amount of effort by individuals. In the
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 all we strive for is to advance and we have to rely on our previous
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accomplishments
 to break our current limits.
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To enhance your task response, ensure to fully address the topic within the essay by offering more balanced arguments about both the benefits and disadvantages of information technology. Expanding on the discussion with further analysis and providing a more nuanced conclusion might be beneficial.
coherence cohesion
Improve coherence by organizing your ideas more logically. Starting with a clear introduction that outlines the essay's direction, followed by paragraphs that each focus on a single main idea, will improve readability and flow. Linking words and phrases can also help to connect your ideas more smoothly.
coherence cohesion
To strengthen the cohesion of your essay, aim to clearly state and support each main point you're discussing with specific examples and explanations. This can be achieved by ensuring each paragraph centres around a unique aspect of your argument, adequately supported by evidence or examples.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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