The pie chart shows the amount of money that a children's charity located in the USA spent and received in one year.

The pie chart shows the amount of money that a children's charity located in the USA spent and received in one year.
The pie chart shows us the different sections of costs and the income sources of the American charity organization .
An
Correct article usage
The
show examples
overall
amount
of
money
the charity gained is $53,561,589. And, the expenditure
amount
is $336693
lesser
Correct word choice
less
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compared to the
revenue
amount
. There are
revenue
sources including six sections
while
expenditures consist of three sections.  
According to
the pie chart, in the
revenue
section, the donated food,
86.6
Add a missing verb
was 86.6
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% and the least earning source was Government grants and Investment income the percentage of both is 0.2%. And, community contributions contributed 10.4% of
money
Add an article
the money
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as an income A large
amount
of
money
was spent on different program services which is 95.8%. 2.6% of
money
spent
Add a missing verb
is spent
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for
Change preposition
on
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raising funds
while
management and general
accounts
Fix the agreement mistake
account
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for 1.6%. It should be noted that
charity
Correct article usage
the charity
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was able to cover the expenditures with the
revenue
amount
they
have got
Wrong verb form
had
show examples
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words amount, money, revenue with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 5 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • donations
  • grants
  • fundraising events
  • expenditure
  • administration costs
  • program expenses
  • direct benefits
  • indirect benefits
  • underprivileged children
  • education
  • healthcare
  • shelter
  • nourishment
  • medical treatments
  • basic needs
  • financial sustainability
  • transparency
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