The diagram below shows a small local museum and its surroundings in 1957 and 2007.

The diagram below shows a small local museum and its surroundings in 1957 and 2007.
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This
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is a rudimentary picture of a
museum
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at 2 points in time.
Overall
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there have been lots of changes both in the exterior and interior of the
museum
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. One of the things
that is
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noticeable is the way that the road leading to the
museum
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has been replaced by a car park. We can see in the picture that a huge amount of forest life has been cut down.
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, the type of tree to the west of the
Museum
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has completely changed. The two trees on the northwest side of the
museum
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have stayed the same and have not changed. As another point, The interior of the building has undergone a big shakeup. The store room is now the main point of entry. The only room that has been kept is the shop. The building has gained 3 additional rooms and from the looks of it completely removed the door that would currently open in either reception or cafe.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words museum with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • renovation
  • architectural trends
  • landscaping
  • infrastructure
  • civic development
  • cultural hub
  • heritage conservation
  • urban planning
  • visitor amenities
  • sustainability efforts
  • technological integration
  • aesthetic appeal
  • community engagement
  • accessibility improvements
  • pedestrian-friendly
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