The diagram below shows a small local museum and its surroundings in 1957 and 2007.

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This

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is a rudimentary picture of a

museum

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at 2 points in time.

Overall

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there have been lots of changes both in the exterior and interior of the

museum

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. One of the things

that is

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noticeable is the way that the road leading to the

museum

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has been replaced by a car park. We can see in the picture that a huge amount of forest life has been cut down.

Also

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, the type of tree to the west of the

Museum

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has completely changed. The two trees on the northwest side of the

museum

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have stayed the same and have not changed. As another point, The interior of the building has undergone a big shakeup. The store room is now the main point of entry. The only room that has been kept is the shop. The building has gained 3 additional rooms and from the looks of it completely removed the door that would currently open in either reception or cafe.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words museum with synonyms.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

160 words

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