Whether or not someone achieves their aims in life is mostly a question of luck? To what extent do you agree or disagree?

There is no doubt that some people think that achieving their aims in
life
needs some
luck
and others think
opposite
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.In my point of view, I totally disagree with the statement in spite of two reasons
such
as hard
work
and
support
from others.In the next paragraph,I will discuss the reasons in detail.
To begin
with,for an individual to become a successful person needs a lot of hard
work
and sacrifice because there is nothing in
this
world
is
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that is
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free,in
this
modern era,individuals need to
work
to provide needs for their families and themselves.
For example
,students need to study in order to pass an exam and they cannot based on their
luck
to
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apply
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pass an exam.Next,
families
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family
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support
also
play
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plays
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a significant part
on
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in
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helping a person to achieve their goals in
life
.
For example
,moral
support
from their loved ones can help them to feel motivated and boost one's self-esteem.
Therefore
,I believe that with many efforts and
battle
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battles
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in
life
surely every individual can increase
life
expectancy.
In addition
,financial
support
will help ease a person's
life
.
In contrast
,it is debated for people to think that using their
luck
to achieve
somethings
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something
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not
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is not
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just their goal but
also
a happy
life
.
For example
,a newborn baby with a healthy body is luckier compared to other babies with bad conditions of health. In conclusion,in order for humans to reach for the greater
life
,they need to start with hard
work
and determination.
Although
some
luck
might be helpful for some occasions.In my opinion,I strongly disagree with the statement.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • aims
  • determination
  • resilience
  • opportunities
  • effort
  • planning
  • unpredictability
  • innovation
  • perseverance
  • perception
  • sustainability
  • adaptation
  • networking
  • initiative
  • random chance
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