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The graph below gives information on the differences in clothing exports from three different countries

The graph below gives information on the differences in clothing exports from three different countries
#information #differences #exports #three #countries
The line graph illustrates
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information
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the
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clothing exports from three different countries
namly
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namely
Myanmar
,Japan and Colombia
in
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 1999 until 2003 with instruments in millions of dollars. As seen from the graph,
Myanmar
country has
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 a lower number in 1999 compared to
other
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the other
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 two countries with
a
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zero
million
of
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dollar
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.
However
,
this
 country
manages
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 to climb to 800
million
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dolar
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dollars
dollar
 in the next year and reach a peak point of 900
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of
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dollars
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dollar
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 in the following year.
Unfortunaly
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Unfortunately
,in 2002,
Myanmar
 country had
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 the crisis and
drop
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 dramatically to 320
million
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dollar
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 and ended at 420
million
of
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dollar
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dollars
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 in 2003.
In contrast
,Japan started at the higher figures in 1999 with a number 580
million
 of
dollar
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.
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 trends have up and down in rates and ended at 490
million
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dollar
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 after 4 years.Meanwhile,Colombia
have
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 second higher in figures with 470
million
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dollar
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dollars
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 in 1999,
this
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have
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had
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 a positive pace until reaching
at
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it
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 peak
on
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 2002 with a rate of 700
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dollar
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 and dropped to 610
million
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dollar
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.
Overall
,Colombia and
Myanmar
 in clothing exports have both a positive result compared to
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Japan.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words myanmar, million, dollar with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 2 times.
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