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The maps below shows an industrial area in the town of norbiton, and planned future development of the site

The maps below shows an industrial area in the town of norbiton, and planned future development of the site
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The maps illustrate the blueprint of an
indutrial
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industrial
 in
town
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 of Norbiton .There are two
picures
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pictures
displays
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as
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above one is
current
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the current
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 blueprint of Norbito
industrial
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 and
other
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the other
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 is
future
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 planned development blueprint. As seen from the
map
,the developers planned to demolish all
the
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eight factories in the future.
As a result
,they are planning to
built
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 new facilities.On the south
side
 of the
map
,two
building
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buildings
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 will be built
such
 as shops on the left and the medical
centra
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centre
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 on the right
side
.
While
 on the east
side
 of the
map
 will be replaced by new houses,
playground
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a playground
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 for the kids and
school
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a school
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.There are
also
 new upgrades on transportation
pathway
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pathways
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 like
new
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a new
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road
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roads
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 added across the river for the
convienence
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convenience
 of the residents.
Finally
, the farmland will be relocated to the
north east
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northeast
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side
 of the
map
due to
 new housing and road pathway development.
Overall
,the town of Norbiton will be
fulled
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 of residents
instead
 of
the
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factory workers in the future time.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words map, side with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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