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The chart below gives information about the number of social networking sites people used in Canada in 2014 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The chart below gives information about the number of social networking sites people used in Canada in 2014 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
#information #sites #people #canada #summarise #features #comparisons
The given features
illustracts
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illustrate
 the distribution of people in British spending on
charity
 by age range for 1990 and 2010. Detailed information is in the following. Generally speaking, the percentage of
citizen
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citizens
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pay
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paying
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money
 to
charity
 is below
average
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the average
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 of
British
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the British
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 population in both
year
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years
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. It is
clearly
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clear
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 that
higher
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a higher
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 amount of adults aged above 36 would give
money
 to the
charity
 significantly.
To begin
 with,
while
higher
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a higher
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 percentage of dwellers
make
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made
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a donation
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donation
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donations
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 in 1990 than
2010
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in 2010
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that
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apply
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aged from 18 to 50,
larger
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a larger
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 proportion of people donated
money
 in 2010 than 1990
who
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those
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 aged between 51 and 65. The percentage of people
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who give
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give
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gave
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money
 to
charity
 between aged
oven
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over
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 50 in 1990 and 2010
were
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was
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 similar.
While
 35% and 40% of
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the bristish
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bristish
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British
 contributed wealth to
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the organisation
an organisation
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organisation
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organisations
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 in 1990 and 2010 respectively, 33% and 35% of
public
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the public
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offer
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offered
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 funds to
charity
.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words charity, money with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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