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The chart shows requests for information at a tourist office in the United Kingdom from January to June.

The chart shows requests for information at a tourist office in the United Kingdom from January to June.
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The line graph illustrates
requests
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 for data at a tourist office in the UK from
January
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 to
June
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.
Overall
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, in
January
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in
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apply
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Add a comma
person,
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person
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personal
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information
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requests
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 were the lowest,
whereas
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, in
June
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requests
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 for
information
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 in
person
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 were the highest. As can clearly be seen, originally the
requests
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 by
letter
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/
email
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 were a little less than 800,
however
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, from
January
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 to March the number of
requests
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 gradually decreased and in March, the number of
requests
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 by
letter
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/
email
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 was 700. From March to May the
requests
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 by
letter
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/
email
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 declined rapidly and in May, the number of
requests
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 by
letter
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/
email
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 was roughly 380. From May to
June
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 the
requests
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 remained unchanged.
Initially
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,
requests
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 for data by telephone were the highest accounting for 900, meanwhile,
requests
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 for
information
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 in
person
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 were the lowest at a little more than 400. From
January
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 to February the figure of
requests
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 by telephone dropped,
however
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, over time the figure of
requests
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 started to increase and in
June
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requests
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 by telephone reached its peak at 1600. From
January
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 to
June
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requests
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 in
person
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 rose and in
June
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it
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they
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 reached
its
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their
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 peak at 1900. In
June
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in
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apply
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person
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requests
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 were the highest accounting for 1900,
while
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by
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apply
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letter
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/
email
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information
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requests
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 were the lowest accounting for approximately 380.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words requests, january, june, person, information, letter, email with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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