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The
two
 tables contain data relating to the outcomes
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 of
two
 specific goods which are coffee and bananas in five nations in
two
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the two
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 years of 1999 and 2004.
Additionally
, the measurement was recorded in euros. Generally speaking, the sales of fairtrade-labelled
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coffee in all countries increased.
Futhermore
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Furthermore
, those for bananas in most nations
also
 went up, except for Belgium and Sweden. Beginning with the outcomes of
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 coffee, the UK stood at 1.5
millions
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 before having the most significant jump in the table to 20
millions
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this
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the country recording
highest
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 data.
Similarly
, Switzerland recorded at 3
millions
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ans
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and
then
 doubled to 6
millions
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.
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 to the remaining countries, there had been a similar increase from the range of 0.8 to 1.8
millions
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 to the range of 1 to 2
millions
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 respectively. Moving to those for bananas, the UK was the country recording the highest figures throughout the timeframe,
while
 experiencing the most considerable increase to 47
millions
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 from 15
millions
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. Switzerland and Denmark
similarly
 stood at 1
millions
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 and 0.6
millions
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 respectively, before jumping significantly to 5.5
millions
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 and 4
milliions
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millions
million
 in that order.
By contrast
, Belgium and Sweden
was
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 the
two
 countries seeing a decrease to 1
millions
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million
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 and 0.9
millions
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million
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 from 1.8
millions
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million
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 and 2
millions
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 respectively.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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