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In today’s world, private companies rather than the government pay for and conduct most scientific research. Do you think the advantages outweigh disadvantages

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There are two controversial perspectives heating a debate over the fact in
this
 day and age that most scientific
research
 is financed and carried out by private firms
instead
 of the governor. In my opinion, the benefits of
this
 can overshadow its cons Without a shadow of a doubt, when private companies decide to pay
money
 and conduct scientific
research
 there are various benefits. To be more specific, if a company invests their
money
 for scientists to do
research
 in a specific field their biggest target is the profit they can obtain, so they will utilize various methods in order to minimize the total cost and gain as much
profits
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 as they can.
Therefore
, they will strictly order their scientist to follow the deadlines with a view to
prevent
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 wasting
money
 and
time consuming
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.
As a
result
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result,
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 the product of their firm will be manufactured in a short period of time and more
money
-efficient than those were researched by the governor.
Furthermore
, if the government lets private companies carry out scientific
research
 it can help them have more
money
 and time to allocate to
other field
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another field
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such
 as
environment
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the environment
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 or education
On the contrary
, I think if the government lets private businesses sponsor or undertake scientific
research
 it will bring about significant drawbacks.Because the company has to spend a huge amount of
money
 on their budget to do all the
research
so
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they won’t let them
to
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be freely used,
instead
 if a person wants to have full access
right
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apply
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to all the study information it is obligatory for them to pay a certain fee. In
my
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conclusion, there are some demerits
appear
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that appear
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 if the Governor let private companies fund their
money
 and conduct
of
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scientific
research
however
 it can’t overcome its merits
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • groundbreaking technologies
  • efficiently allocate resources
  • innovative projects
  • strict timelines
  • profit motives
  • basic research
  • commercial application
  • corporate funding
  • biases in research
  • unbiased exploration
  • balanced exploration
  • public sector
  • private sector
  • synergy
  • comprehensive outcomes
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