You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Some people say that modern technology has made shopping today easier, while others disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinion You should write at least 250 words.
Many people say that
due to
up-to-date Change preposition
apply
technology
has made shopping easier nowadays, while
others disagree. In my opinion, many benefits of modern technology
outweigh the negative impacts. This
essay will discuss both perspectives before presenting my own viewpoint in the impending paragraph.
Modern technology
is really happening nowadays. More years ahead will be lots of new technologies include
shopping Wrong verb form
including
technology
, for instance
, online shopping. In the
application usually Change preposition
The
sell
so many Correct subject-verb agreement
sells
things
from important things
such
as for households, medicine, food, clothes and travel tickets until
unique Change preposition
to
things
such
as decorating things
for room
or desk. Correct article usage
a room
Additionally
. all things
that sell
in the offline store will Wrong verb form
are sold
also
available
in the online store. Add a missing verb
be available
Therefore
, it will make our life easier due to
reach
far Wrong verb form
reaching
district
in the country. Everyone who Fix the agreement mistake
districts
life
in the suburban area can shop anything by online without coming to the city centre. Directly, it will increase Replace the word
lives
gross
domestic product within a country rapidly.
Meanwhile, many people feel difficulty Correct article usage
the gross
to
the change of the new Change preposition
with
technology
, especially old people like our parents. Hence
, they will disagree to
Change preposition
with
this
online shopping. As Correct determiner usage
apply
a
children, they will Correct article usage
apply
be
an important role Verb problem
play
to help
and Change preposition
in helping
teach
their parents to use the application. Wrong verb form
teaching
For example
, how to use online doctor consultation
to check their health or how to buy vegetables and meat for daily food at home in Fix the agreement mistake
consultations
online
shop.
In conclusion, numerous merits will Add an article
an online
the online
comes
into our daily life when using new Change the verb form
come
technology
, not only for shopping our
needs but Change preposition
for our
also
media social for our communication in the
Correct article usage
apply
sociaty
even though we will need some effort to understand.Correct your spelling
society
Submitted by Dedeways244 on
Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.
structural organization
Focus on providing a clear structure for your essay. Start with an introduction that presents the main topic and your stance. Continue with paragraphs that discuss each view and your own perspective, and conclude summarizing the discussed views and reaffirming your opinion.
paragraphing and coherence
Use paragraphs to separate different ideas for clearer progression and coherence. Ensure each paragraph discusses a single main idea, supported by examples or explanations.
linking words usage
Utilize a wider range of linking words and phrases to better connect ideas within and between paragraphs, enhancing the overall flow of your writing.
task response
Clearly address the prompt by discussing both views mentioned, and clearly state your own opinion. Make sure your opinion is evident throughout the essay, not just in the conclusion.
developing arguments
Incorporate more specific examples and explanations to support your points. Specific examples make your arguments more persuasive and your writing more interesting to read.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.
‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.
Examples:
I really want to study but I’m too tired.
I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.
If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.