The tables show the populations of eight capital and eight provincial cities in 1999. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie chart provides information about the
number
of people in rural and urban areas in the year 1999. Overall
, the largest number
of different nationalities lived in the city while
only a small fraction of people lived in countryside
.
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the countryside
To begin
with, 99% of Chinese citizens were living urban
areas in the year 1999, Change preposition
in urban
it
was the highest proportion among other nationalities. It was followed by New Correct pronoun usage
which
Zealander
, British, and Dutch with 90%, 89%, and 83%, respectively. Meanwhile, only 80% of Australians preferred city life, the lowest percentage in all.
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Zealanders
On the other hand
, the difference of
people living in Change preposition
between
countryside
was evidently low. The Add an article
the countryside
number
of Australians that were living in the urban area was 20%, the highest number
in regional
area. With regards to Dutch, British, and New Add an article
a regional
the regional
Zealander
, it only ranged from 10 to 17%. Fix the agreement mistake
Zealanders
Lastly
, the remaining 1% of Chinese was situated in rural area
.Fix the agreement mistake
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