In the future nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything thwey want online without paying. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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In
modern
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world
every
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information has shifted to digital
platform
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platforms
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.Even reading newspapers and
books
also
moved rapidly towards
digitally
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digital
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.It is
most
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essential for our
fast growing
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technology and
also
it is effortless for common
people
to save their time and money.In
this
essay,
i
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agree with the perspective that in the
future
.
people
will completely shift towards the digital
platform
for newspapers
instead
of reading it
in
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from
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offline sources.
To begin
with , online reading is more
convenience
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to
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for
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people
.They are eager to read online news and digital
books
mostly
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more
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than
the
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physical
books
or newspapers.
People
can read anything through
internet
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the internet
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without leaving their homes.
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, physical
books
or
news papers
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newspapers
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are
need
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needed
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to buy in stores.
As a
result
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result,
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it is wandering and time-consuming and
also
expensive.
Furthermore
, online reading
have
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a facility for personalization.
People
have
choice
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the choice
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to read what is more significant to them.
For instance
,Most
of
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the
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people
have
interest
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an interest
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to read
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in reading
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the book
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book
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books
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personally.So the online
platform
made that provision
whoever
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to whoever
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want
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. Another reason, the production and
man power
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manpower
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are too high when compared to the digital
platform
.
As a
result
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printing papers is too expensive.
Additionally
,many surveys
says
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most of the
people
have
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are
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interested in online
platform
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platforms
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instead
of physical
books
.
Furthermore
, digital reading is more eco-friendly.
In contrast
,physical reading has
problem
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problems
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in pollution,contamination and
also
deforestation.
As a
result
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more
people
turns
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to
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the eco
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eco friendly
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eco-friendly
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option of digital reading.
To
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conclusion, the
future
of reading
move
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is moving
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towards the online
platform
.We should accept the reading and stand helpful for eco-friendliest and
non polluted
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non-polluted
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evironment
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environment
in
future
.Some
believes
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believe
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even in
future
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the future
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many
people
will have
interest
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an interest
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in print media .
However
, the rapid growth of online
platform
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platforms
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is
tremendeous
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tremendous
.So we cannot deny that.
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