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Some people believe nowadays we have too many choices. To what extend do you agree or disagree to this statement?

#people #choices
Today, many think that we have too many
options
 to decide. I totally agree with
this
 statement because we now have
endless
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 amount of liberal entities that serve us about anything we need and do not actually need, and the internet constantly informs us about them. Competition between certain businesses is making them more, and
therefore
 the service
options
 we get from them
is
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 rising more than ever before. If we want to receive any kind of service about any topic, we generally have to decide between a wide range of
options
. About a holiday we want to attend,
for example
, there are numerous
options
 in terms of accommodation
as
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 hostels, hotels, bungalows, tree houses,
capsule
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 hotels and
this
 range of alternatives is a cumulative result of certain cooperations which try to create something different from its competitors, and we, as their subject, end up deciding between those high ranged spectrum they have created.
As a result
 of
this
 highly developed range of
options
, many people use systems for making decisions
such
 as
fortune
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 of
wheels
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.
Moreover
, even in
this
 area, there is a company race between the sellers that
end
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 up giving more alternatives to us. Another reason why I think we currently have to choose between lots of alternatives is because the amount of knowledge we collect from the internet makes us decide between the things we have never taught before. Nowadays social platforms
such
 as TikTok and YouTube are mainly used for product marketing, and the things companies try to sell to us are being seen everywhere on those platforms, which nearly everyone uses on a daily basis to relax.
However
, scrolling on any platform makes us decide between buying the merchandise they sell or ignoring it. Despite
this
 itself being a decision to make, the real mind-making process starts if that person decides to buy a product about that specific area.
To conclude
,
as a result
 of the race between corporations and
internet
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 serving them as their advertisers, we now have endless
options
 to decide as individuals.
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Make sure your introduction more clearly states your position and outlines the main points of your argument. This helps the reader understand what to expect in your essay.
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Provide more detailed examples and evidence for your claims. This will strengthen your argument and make your essay more persuasive.
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Work on making your transitions between paragraphs smoother. Use linking phrases to help guide the reader through your argument and improve the flow of your essay.
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Consider expanding your conclusion to more clearly summarize your main points and restate your position. This helps solidify your argument in the reader's mind.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • overwhelmed
  • decision fatigue
  • paralysis by analysis
  • consumerism
  • globalization
  • personal autonomy
  • market saturation
  • option overload
  • decision-making process
  • psychological well-being
  • buyer's remorse
  • customization
  • trade-offs
  • minimalism
  • information superhighway
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