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Write a letter to the manager of your insurance company. In your letter:  Describe the item you lost.  Explain how you lost it.  Tell the insurance company what you would like them to do.

#manager #insurance #company #item
Dear Sir/Madam I am writing to concern
with
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about
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 my
suitcase
 that I lost a week ago. I returned from Paris to Moscow by
airplane
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aeroplane
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of
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from
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Sibir Airline Company. Let me
discribe
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describe
 my
suitcase
, so it was
colored
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 black and on it were red lines and it had
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a wite
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wite
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white
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 zip.
On
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In
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 my
suitcase
 were some important documents. I would like to tell you that my issue
happend
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happened
happens
happen
due to
problem
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a problem
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of
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with
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the airplane
an airplane
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airplane
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aeroplane
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 during when
plane
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the plane
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 landed
to
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at
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airport
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the airport
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 . It is horrible when you
listen
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 that have a danger of
plane
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planes
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 and
that is
 why everybody started
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to harry
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harry
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hurry
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 up to go out. So I
also
harred
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hard
 to go out from
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the airplane
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airplane
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aeroplane
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 and we all our items left in
plane
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the plane
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 . And
then
 I
relized
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realized
realised
 that I lost my bag. I consider that we must open clime for it and I wish to refund
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the
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price of my
suitcase
 . It
were
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was
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jast
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just
 250 $ when I bought it. I am looking forward to
get
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getting
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 your
desision
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decision
 about
this
 issue . Yours faithfully Zohrab
Submitted by zohrab-gevorgyan on

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coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph focuses on a single idea. The second paragraph could be split to distinctly describe the lost item and then explain how it was lost in separate paragraphs.
logical structure
The letter structure could be improved by clearly separating information into paragraphs: introduction, description of the lost item, explanation of how it was lost, and what you expect from the insurance company.
suitable writing tone
Use a formal tone throughout the letter. Avoid using slang expressions (e.g., 'harry up') and contractions to maintain formality, which is expected in a letter to a business or authority.
complete response
Re-check the letter for spelling and grammar mistakes, which can hinder the clarity of your message. Pay particular attention to the correct spelling of words ('discribe' should be 'describe', 'clime' should be 'claim', etc.).
greeting and closing
Conclude your letter with a formal closing statement followed by your name to maintain the formal tone.

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