The chart shows British emigration to selected destinations between 2004 and 2007 . Summarize the information and make comparison.

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The presented bar chart illustrates destinations chosen by UK citizens over a four-year period.

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, it can be seen that Australia was selected by

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people more than four other countries in all years.

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, Spain and New Zealand experienced fall trends over the given time,

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the figure for the USA had some fluctuation during the period. In detail, in the first two years, around 40000

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selected Australia,

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number rose dramatically to more

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thousand in 2006, and

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declined to almost 42000 people.

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, Spain was selected by around 33 thousand UK citizens;

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, in 2007

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destination was chosen by only 28000 people. Despite the fact that the

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emigration to New Zealand witnessed a gradual decrease over the given time, the USA and France experienced

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fluctuation. In the beginning, Only 22 thousand

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opted for France,

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compared to 2004 over the following 3 years, a

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trend can be observed.

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