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The graph below shows the percentage of people in the different age group who went to the cinema once a month in Great Britain. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the percentage of people in the different age group who went to the cinema once a month in Great Britain. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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amount
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number
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 of
people
 visiting the cinema once a month from various groups of age in Great Britain, counted in
percent
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per cent
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, from 1984 to 2000.
Overall
, there was a progressive growth pattern observed in all data. With regard to 7-4-year-olds
people
, it took up the most remarkable part at over 15 in 1984, which
then
 experienced a vigorous and relentless rise to approximately 60 and maintained its crown in 2000. In terms of
people
in
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the
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age
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aged
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 from 15 to 24 years old, starting from exactly 10 in 1984, it hiked exponentially by 20 in the final year,
although
 its peak at merely 40 was reached in 1999. As for
people
 in
25
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-35-year-olds and over age groups, despite having a comparatively similar initial point at more than 0 in 1984, they were different in the level of growth.
While
 the former witnessed a dramatic increase to more than 30 in
a
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the
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 subsequent 16 years, the latter grew steadily and topped
in
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at
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 the
year
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 end at half of that number.
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