some people view sports as an important feature of our society while others feel it is nothing more than a leisure activety.
It is argued that some humans look to sports as an essential feature of our community.
While
others believe it is not that important and it is just leisure
activity .I believe that despite gym members wanting to show as luxurious Correct article usage
a leisure
people
, it is help
women and men in Change the verb form
helps
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a perservise
perservise
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preservice
way
it is keep
our bodies more flexible and Change the verb form
keeps
healther
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healthier
also
, it is improves
and Change the verb form
is improving
is improved
develop
mental Correct subject-verb agreement
develops
health
.
First of all , doing exercises every day have
a preservice impact on our Correct subject-verb agreement
has
bodies
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body's
bodies'
health
.Having an
specific time daily to run or jump can activate our muscles to Change the article
a
be
easy to move in jobs Verb problem
make it
need
un hard or continuous hours rather than being lazy person will Correct pronoun usage
that need
tired
in Change the verb form
be tired
first
second.Change the article
the first
Also
, it will protect us from getting overweight people
which can lead to several diseases like diabetes and put our lives in
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at
risks
.Fix the agreement mistake
risk
For instance
, researchers approved walking every day for 30 mins
will drop the percentage of Correct your spelling
minutes
getting
diabetes patients by 30%.
Verb problem
apply
Secondly
, what it
is Correct pronoun usage
apply
majority
of boys and girls do not realize Add an article
the majority
a majority
it
how is doing simple training in Correct pronoun usage
apply
there
mind and mental Replace the word
their
health
from damage.Running for 20mins
per day will activate Correct your spelling
20 minutes
there
mind cells from Replace the word
their
die
and the Wrong verb form
dying
way
that we think by
it will expand in a positive Change preposition
about
way
. Deepreasion
, anxiety and stress will stay away from society Correct your spelling
Depression
while
they keep
active Verb problem
stay
poeple
and Correct your spelling
people
there
mental age will stay younger Replace the word
their
in
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as
result
of having Add an article
the result
a result
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a healther
healther
and younger body .Correct your spelling
healthier
For example
, it is approved by a lots
of athletes that training save us from getting mental disorders by 60%.
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a lot
lots
To conclude
, i
strongly believe that Change the capitalization
I
although
some people
think it is futile and just a way
to show leisure , it saves people
's mental and physical health
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