it is important for children to learn the different between right and wrong at early age. punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction

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children what is wrong and right
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is something
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crucial
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and parents should put a sort of
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to help them learn the
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very normal as a kid, and
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behaviours tend to be more
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they grow up. I think understanding human
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us to
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two ways of acting.
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punishment
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them
is limiting hours of play and it is the most effective
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going to recognize that
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you should know how to
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your child in
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right and
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wrong and
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propreit
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