The bar chart below shows the number of employed persons by job type and sex for Australia last year Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the number of employed persons by job type and sex for Australia last year

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart provides figures concerning seven different kinds of occupation and their relation with active workers in Australia
last
year.
Overall
, it is possible to see that clerical and professional jobs are mainly occupied by men, even though the difference between female workers and male workers is not so huge,
whereas
the other five job types are
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by women. Concerning the role played by women
on
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work
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the work
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market, it is interesting to note that tradespeople-related jobs have nine times more
female
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females
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working on
it
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, with figures
by
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900,000.
In addition
, Managers, Production and Labourers
,
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are
also
fields where female
work-force
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is prevalent.
Mens
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Men
represented one-third
from
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600,000, one-fifth
from
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almost 500,500, and almost
three-fourth
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three-fourths
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from
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400,000, respectively. Clerical and professional jobs,
on the other hand
, are mainly occupied by males.
However
, the difference between
women
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women's
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occupation
rate
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rates
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working
on
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the same sector is slightly fewer, being less than 100,000.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Employment figures
  • Sectors
  • Significant disparities
  • Gender balance
  • Skewed
  • Trends
  • Patterns
  • Dominant
  • Inferred
  • Labor market
  • Year-on-year comparison
  • Insights
  • Implications
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