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The chart below gives information about the price of tickets on one airline between Sydney and Melbourne, Australia, over a two-week period in 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information about the price of tickets on one airline between Sydney and Melbourne, Australia, over a two-week period in 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar graph illustrates a comparison of the
cost
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 of airline
tickets
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 from
Sydney
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 to
Melbourne
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 and vice versa in Australia in 2013, broken down into two different weeks. Units are measured in dollars.
Overall
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, it is noticeable that the price of
tickets
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 fluctuated widely in both the first
week
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 and the second
week
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.
Moreover
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, it is
also
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 interesting to note that the
cost
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 of airline
tickets
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 on Friday, Saturday and Sunday is higher than that on other
days
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. From
Sydney
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 to
Melbourne
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, passengers had to pay the most expensive ticket at $80 on Monday in the first
week
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,
while
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 they just had to spend nearly half of
this
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cost
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 on the same day in the second
week
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. In comparison with
this
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, the
cost
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 of airline
tickets
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 on the following
days
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were
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was
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 far cheaper at about $35 in both weeks as opposed to the price of the rest
days
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 which was more than $49. From
Melbourne
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 to
Sydney
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, the trend of the
cost
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 was almost similar to the flight from
Sydney
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 to
Melbourne
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 with the prices being cheaper on Tuesday, Wednesday and Thursday at approximately $33 compared to the rest of the
days
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 which were almost double at least $50.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words cost, tickets, sydney, melbourne, week, days with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "comparison" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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