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Band 4

You are due to start a new job next week but you will not be able to because you have some problems. Write a letter to your new employer. In your letter • explain your situation • describe your problems • tell him/her when you think you can start.

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Dear Ms. Jone I am writing to
connecting
Wrong verb form
connect

It appears that your sentence or clause uses an incorrect form of the verb connecting. Consider changing it.

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 with my
a
Correct article usage
apply

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new coming problem, as you know I must
come
Add the preposition
come to

The phrase following the intransitive verb come seems to be missing a preposition. Consider adding one.

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 my new position as
a
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an

The article a may be incorrect. Consider changing it to agree with the beginning sound of the following word assistant.

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 assistant
of
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apply

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manager
this
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.
Mondey
Correct your spelling
Monday

If you don’t want Mondey to be marked as misspelled in the future, you can add it to your personal dictionary.

, but as you know from my interview I have had working with my uncle as
business
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a business

The noun phrase business consultant seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.

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 consultant
,
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apply

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but
gains
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gained

It appears that your sentence or clause uses an incorrect form of the verb gains. Consider changing it.

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 some problem with him and he must go to
hospital
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the hospital
a hospital

The noun phrase hospital seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.

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 for
a
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an

The article a may be incorrect. Consider changing it to agree with the beginning sound of the following word operation.

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 operation and my aunt will be alone and ask
my
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me

It appears that the pronoun my should not be in the possessive form. Consider changing it.

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 that I will help her until return my
ancle
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uncle
ankle
angle

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. So I
ask
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am asking

It appears that your sentence or clause uses an incorrect form of the verb ask. Consider changing it.

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 you if it is possible, I will start
to
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in

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 my new position two
week
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weeks

The singular noun week follows a number other than one. Consider changing the noun to the plural form.

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 later and I would like to inform you that for me it is significant to change my job, and I guess your company will give me an opportunity to use my huge experience, which I have gotten from my previous jobs. So I hope you will realize me and give me that chance to continue
help
Wrong verb form
helping

It appears that your sentence or clause uses an incorrect form of the verb help. Consider changing it.

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 my aunt and
then
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

 allow me to
come
Add the preposition
come to

The phrase following the intransitive verb come seems to be missing a preposition. Consider adding one.

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 my new job.
Your
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Yours

It appears that the word Your is not the correct form of the possessive pronoun. Consider changing it.

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 faithfully Zohrab

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greeting and closing
Ensure correct and conventional use of opening and closing. Instead of 'Dear Ms. Jone', use 'Dear Ms. Jones,' and 'Your faithfully' should be corrected to 'Yours faithfully,'.
suitable writing tone
Adhere to a more formal tone and manner throughout your letter. Avoid colloquial language and ensure proper spelling and punctuation. For example, replace 'my new coming problem' with 'an issue that has recently arisen' for a more professional tone.
logical structure
Clearly structure your letter into paragraphs, each with a single idea: introduction, explanation of the problems, and your request. Ensure each paragraph smoothly transitions to the next to improve flow and understanding.
complete response
Extend your response to clearly explain your problems and how they impact your ability to start the job. Additionally, provide a more concrete plan or alternatives for your start date, showing consideration for the employer's situation.
single idea per paragraph
For a clearer connection between ideas, use cohesive devices appropriately. Fluctuating between past and present tenses can confuse readers. Maintain a consistent tense to enhance readability.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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