You are due to start a new job next week but you will not be able to because you have some problems. Write a letter to your new employer. In your letter • explain your situation • describe your problems • tell him/her when you think you can start.
Dear Ms. Jone
I am writing to
connecting
with my Wrong verb form
connect
a
new coming problem, as you know I must Correct article usage
apply
come
my new position as Add the preposition
come to
a
assistant Change the article
an
of
manager Change preposition
apply
this
Mondey
, but as you know from my interview I have had working with my uncle as Correct your spelling
Monday
business
consultant Add an article
a business
,
but Remove the comma
apply
gains
some problem with him and he must go to Wrong verb form
gained
hospital
for Add an article
the hospital
a hospital
a
operation and my aunt will be alone and ask Change the article
an
my
that I will help her until return my Change the pronoun
me
ancle
.
So I Correct your spelling
uncle
ankle
angle
ask
you if it is possible, I will start Wrong verb form
am asking
to
my new position two Change preposition
in
week
later and I would like to inform you that for me it is significant to change my job, and I guess your company will give me an opportunity to use my huge experience, which I have gotten from my previous jobs.
So I hope you will realize me and give me that chance to continueChange to a plural noun
weeks
help
my aunt and Wrong verb form
helping
then
allow me to come
my new job.
Add the preposition
come to
Your
faithfully
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Yours
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greeting and closing
Ensure correct and conventional use of opening and closing. Instead of 'Dear Ms. Jone', use 'Dear Ms. Jones,' and 'Your faithfully' should be corrected to 'Yours faithfully,'.
suitable writing tone
Adhere to a more formal tone and manner throughout your letter. Avoid colloquial language and ensure proper spelling and punctuation. For example, replace 'my new coming problem' with 'an issue that has recently arisen' for a more professional tone.
logical structure
Clearly structure your letter into paragraphs, each with a single idea: introduction, explanation of the problems, and your request. Ensure each paragraph smoothly transitions to the next to improve flow and understanding.
complete response
Extend your response to clearly explain your problems and how they impact your ability to start the job. Additionally, provide a more concrete plan or alternatives for your start date, showing consideration for the employer's situation.
single idea per paragraph
For a clearer connection between ideas, use cohesive devices appropriately. Fluctuating between past and present tenses can confuse readers. Maintain a consistent tense to enhance readability.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite