You are due to start a new job next week but you will not be able to because you have some problems. Write a letter to your new employer. In your letter • explain your situation • describe your problems • tell him/her when you think you can start.

Dear Ms. Jone I am writing to
connecting
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with my
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apply
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new coming problem, as you know I must
come
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my new position as
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assistant
of
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manager
this
Mondey
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Monday
, but as you know from my interview I have had working with my uncle as
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consultant
,
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but
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some problem with him and he must go to
hospital
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the hospital
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for
a
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operation and my aunt will be alone and ask
my
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that I will help her until return my
ancle
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uncle
ankle
angle
. So I
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you if it is possible, I will start
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my new position two
week
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later and I would like to inform you that for me it is significant to change my job, and I guess your company will give me an opportunity to use my huge experience, which I have gotten from my previous jobs. So I hope you will realize me and give me that chance to continue
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my aunt and
then
allow me to
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my new job.
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faithfully Zohrab
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greeting and closing
Ensure correct and conventional use of opening and closing. Instead of 'Dear Ms. Jone', use 'Dear Ms. Jones,' and 'Your faithfully' should be corrected to 'Yours faithfully,'.
suitable writing tone
Adhere to a more formal tone and manner throughout your letter. Avoid colloquial language and ensure proper spelling and punctuation. For example, replace 'my new coming problem' with 'an issue that has recently arisen' for a more professional tone.
logical structure
Clearly structure your letter into paragraphs, each with a single idea: introduction, explanation of the problems, and your request. Ensure each paragraph smoothly transitions to the next to improve flow and understanding.
complete response
Extend your response to clearly explain your problems and how they impact your ability to start the job. Additionally, provide a more concrete plan or alternatives for your start date, showing consideration for the employer's situation.
single idea per paragraph
For a clearer connection between ideas, use cohesive devices appropriately. Fluctuating between past and present tenses can confuse readers. Maintain a consistent tense to enhance readability.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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