Global warming is one of the most serious issues that the world is facing today. what are the causes of global warming and what measures can government and individuals take to tackle the issue?

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Nowadays we are facing one of the most serious

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for humanity – global warming.

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decades ago

people

started to realize

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global warming

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a serious

problem

. At

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moment almost all of

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ecologiest

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started warning

goverments

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about global warming consequences. One of the main reasons for warming up

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rise

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of industry in

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half of 20s century. A lot of fabrics and factories were using

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power and

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level of CO2 increased highly.

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of cars, ships and planes increased multiple times and

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of oil products increased

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we all know, high

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of CO2 it is

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main cause

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global warming which can kill everybody. In

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people

have been forced to find alternative sources of

energy

such

as solar

energy

, atomic

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and geothermal

energy

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can help scientists with grants for

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energy

sources. With new

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we can solve

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of producing too much CO2. Individuals

also

can help by using more ecological

transports

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for example

–

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bicycles

sometime

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people

can walk

instead

of driving their cars. In

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I want to say that there are no unsolving problems but we still have to find more ecological

energy

sources which can help us

deacrease

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decrease

global warming. It is a big

problem

for

all

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world and

goverments

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governments

of all countries have to work together because it is a serious question for all

people

. I hope that humanity will handle

this

problem

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burning of fossil fuels
greenhouse gases
trap heat
atmosphere
deforestation
carbon dioxide
greenhouse effect
industrial activities
agricultural practices
carbon emissions
renewable energy
environmental regulations
energy efficiency
carbon footprint
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