Some people think that ti is impossible for females to be successful working women and good mothers at the same time. They also suggest that government should give salary to mothers who stay at home to take care of their children. Do you agree or disagree with the statement

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Women
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are the nurturers who take
care
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of the future generation.
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well being
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of a
mother
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or grandmother is of profound importance to a developing nation, so it's the responsibility of the government to provide a salary to mothers who stay at home." Be
women
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, stay
women
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, and become
women
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" states that a woman's traditional role in ancient civilization was that of a caregiver, and
society
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still believes
women
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are the best at the role of a
mother
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.
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,in the
last
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few decades, there has been a great transformation in typical female roles
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globalisation and industrialization.
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, there has always been a debate about whether a good
mother
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or homemaker could be a good professional. In my opinion,
women
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are good at multitasking, they are capable enough to be
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as well as
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great mothers. Modernization has impacted our
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in various ways, but it is an undeniable fact,
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that in
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our
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, females are still considered to stay at home and take
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of the children. There are constraints imposed on females by the family and social circles.
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, they end up putting their whole effort into grooming the family
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as taking
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of the elders, completing chores, and maintaining harmony in the family. Sadly, her hard work in nurturing her family often goes unnoticed.
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, my
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is a great housewife, her day starts at 4 a.m.,
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apply
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from
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and from
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taking
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of my grandmother to looking after my niece and nephew, she does
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all
single handedly
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. She never gets appreciated for her herculean task;
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, it
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be a turning point if the government could pay a salary for all the homemakers and take
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of their
well being
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.
In contrast
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,globalization has impacted the patterns of
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. Sixty to seventy years ago, we've got to see joint family patterns, contrastingly, in today's world, we notice a lot of nuclear family systems evolving in urban and suburban areas.
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, there is a lot of pressure being built up in the nuclear family regarding finances, childcare, etc., which, in turn,deviates the role of
women
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from being traditional
homemaker
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to multitasking both professionally and personally as a
mother
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, wife , daughter-in-law, etc.
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,
women
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like Indira Nooyi and Sudha Murthy set examples of how to balance both their professional and personal lives. In conclusion, in my opinion , it is necessary to pay mothers because that support will aid the healthy development of our future generations

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task response
Ensure your essay addresses all aspects of the prompt directly. Your essay touches on both views but should more explicitly argue for or against the statement regarding women's ability to be successful and good mothers.
coherence and cohesion
Improve your logical structure by making clearer connections between ideas. Use transition phrases to guide the reader from one idea to the next, enhancing flow and comprehension.
coherence and cohesion
Introduce and conclude your essay more definitively. Your introduction and conclusion should clearly state your main argument, making it easy for the reader to understand your stance.
task response
Enhance your task achievement by providing a clear, unequivocal stance on the topic and supporting it with a balanced range of examples and explanations throughout the essay.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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