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The diagram shows the process of making instant coffee. Write a report of at least 150 words showing the main features and making comparisons where relevant.

The diagram shows the process of making instant coffee. Write a report of at least 150 words showing the main features and making comparisons where relevant.
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The diagram shows the progress of instant
coffee
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 from the farmland to the shops.
overall
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.it is clear to see that there are many steps involved,from harvesting
coffee
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beans
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 to putting them into
the
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jars.
To begin
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 with,
coffee
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beans
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 must first be picked in the fields.These
beans
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 are
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 dried,roasted and cooled before being put in a grinding machine,which turns the
beans
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 into
coffee
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 granules. After
that
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 the
coffee
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beans
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 would become
coffee
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 powder.In the next stage of the process. The
coffee
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 powder is mixed with hot water before straining the mixture
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 the filter liquid is frozen. In the subsequent
stage
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 the frozen mixture is ground once more, and
then
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 the granules are dried in the vacuum, which is used in order to completely remove the moisture.
Finally
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, the dried instant
coffee
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 powder is packaged into containers and distributed to stores for sale.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, beans with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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