It is believed that individuals who engage in reading books can cultivate greater imagination and linguistic abilities than thoise who prefer television. Yo what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Reading is a good habit. Some people believe that those people who read books can improve their imagination and language ability compared to watching television. In my opinion, I completely agree that the benefits of reading are greater than TV.
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of the most significant benefits of reading is that it enhances the cognitive thinking of a person. When someone reads, he needs to use his imagination in order to conceptualize the characters, places, and events that are happening within the story. The writer makes the reader imagine
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instance, an elephant
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flying.
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's vocabulary. It is especially beneficial for non-native English speakers.
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why most teachers advise their students to read if they want to broaden their language ability.
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, I believe that reading can cultivate
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's knowledge.
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, some may argue that television is similar. At some
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it is true, as there are shows
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as National Geographic Channel, where people could be educated.
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, those
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of shows are very minimal. Most programs depict violence and sex, that are not child-friendly. There is a high chance that kids will imitate
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of behavior especially if they watch them without supervision.
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, I believe that TV was made to entertain not to educate. In conclusion, though reading can be boring for some, it is undeniable that it is the best option if
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wants to gain greater imagination and linguistic abilities.
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, if a person seeks entertainment, the television is what he
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.

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