WRITING TASK 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task The following two pie charts show the results of a survey into the popularity of various leisure activities among European adults in 1985 and 1995. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The following chart showcases two pie distributions of leisure
activities
amongst European adults
in two different periods. The first one about
1985 and the second one 10 years later. Add a missing verb
was about
In
Change preposition
This
this
description, it
will Correct pronoun usage
apply
be elucidated
important changes throughout Wrong verb form
elucidate
a
decade.
It can be seen that rather hobbies in 1985 are related to watching TV and Correct article usage
the
hang
out with friends, more than Wrong verb form
hanging
a
half of Correct article usage
apply
population
surveyed Correct article usage
the population
whereas
talking with family and other activities
are less important.
In contrast
, 10 years later spending time had changed dramatically, watching TV is commonly used but a new one arise
and Wrong verb form
has arisen
take
almost three tens of leisure Correct subject-verb agreement
takes
activities
, this
is related to play
computer games. Both surpass the half-barrier. Change the verb form
playing
However
, adults
continue maintaining the percentage of spending time with friends. In fact, it increased 5%.
Thus
, activities
such
as talking with family, eating out and others have been incredibly decreased due to
adults
prefer
to Wrong verb form
preferring
use
their time staying at home playing computer games. Verb problem
spend
For instance
, eating out was commonly used with
23%, almost two Change preposition
by
adults
between a hundred, now in 1995 only the
8% Correct article usage
apply
consumes
food outside, Wrong verb form
consumed
it
means that only eight in Correct pronoun usage
which
a
hundred go out of their Correct article usage
apply
home
. Fix the agreement mistake
homes
In
the other hand, talking with family diminished Change preposition
On
more
than Change preposition
by more
a
half from 18% to 7%. Correct article usage
apply
Overall
, it can be seen that computer games have impacted the activities
of Europeans
Replace the word
European
adults
importantly.Submitted by natalyrau13 on
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words activities, adults with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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