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The charts below show degrees granted in different fields at the National University in the years 1990, 2000, and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words. Degrees Granted at the National University.

The charts below show degrees granted in different fields at the National University in the years 1990, 2000, and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words. Degrees Granted at the National University.
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The charts below show degrees granted in different fields at the National University in the years 1990, 2000 and 2010. There are three
pie
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 charts, 4 that are divided into 4 parts:
computer
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science
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,
medicine
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,
law
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 and
business
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. The first
pie
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chart
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 was created in 1990. As you can see the biggest slices compose 30
percent
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 and it is
computer
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science
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 and
business
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. After there is a
medicine
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 with 25
percent
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, and for the
end
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end,
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 the
law
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 takes 15
percent
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 of the first
pie
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chart
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. In 2000 the percentage of
computer
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science
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 increased to 40
percent
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. But the
business
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pie
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chart
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 fell by 20
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percent
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.
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Nevertheless
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Nevertheless,
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 5
percent
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 were added for the
medicine
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, and it became 30
percent
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. The
law
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pie
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chart
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 still occupies
last
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 place with 10
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percent
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per cent
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. For the
last
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pie
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chart
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 in 2010
computer
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science
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 again increased
till
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to
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 45
percent
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. The percentage of
medicine
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's
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chart
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 fell down to 5
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percent
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 and the final percentage is 25%. And the
pie
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 charts
of
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for
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business
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 and
law
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, are 15
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percent
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per cent
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words pie, computer, science, medicine, law, business, chart, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 9 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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