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Last month, you visited another town. You had arranged to meet up with a friend who lives in the town, but you were not able to do so. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter - apologise for not meeting him/her - explain why you did not contact him/her earlier - suggest a time and place to meet in the future.

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Dear Raghav, I hope you are doing well. I want to say sorry, for not meeting you
last
 month, as promised. My boss dropped the bomb on me. He wanted me to meet one of the biggest contributors to the company that's why I was not able to contact you. But now, I will make it up to you.
This
 time I took an off for a week.
Also
, I have arranged some awesome stuff to do when I will come to your town. we will hit up some cool spots in
city
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downtown
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 area. By keeping your working hours in mind, I have made an itinerary. At the weekend, we will go to a temple that's famous in your city. I am so excited, that I am counting the days to see you. I can't wait to hang out with you and to recall our childhood memories. Your friend, Bhavika
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coherence cohesion
To make your letter even more cohesive, consider starting the third paragraph with a transition phrase like 'To make it up to you,' or 'Looking ahead,' to provide a clearer link to previous information.
task achievement
While your letter provides a good explanation of why you couldn't meet and offers a future plan, a bit more detail or empathy in your apology could enhance the task response. For example, 'I regret that I couldn't even spare a moment to call you' could add more depth to your apology.
suitable writing tone
Your letter maintains a friendly and warm tone throughout, which is very suitable for this task.
logical structure
You provided a clear, logical structure with well-defined paragraphs, each handling a specific part of the task.
greeting and closing
The closing paragraph is very effective, showing excitement and reinforcing the bond between you and your friend.
single idea per paragraph
Each paragraph focuses on a single idea, making your letter easy to read and understand.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Apologize
  • Regret
  • Unforeseen circumstances
  • Overwhelming
  • Busy
  • Unexpected
  • Reschedule
  • Availability
  • Convenient
  • Mutually agreeable
  • Apologies
  • Inconvenience
  • Disappointment
  • Miscommunication
  • Misunderstanding
  • Prior commitment
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