60.The table and graph below show information about cinema visits in Auckland between 1995 and 2003. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

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The table and graph illustrate the percentage of

visits

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attending the

cinema

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in Auckland, considering their ages from 1996 to 2000.

Overall

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, the least amount of visitors went to the

cinema

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at the start of the period,

whereas

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the highest was in 1997, 1998, and 2000.

Additionally

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, the most frequent year for watching movies at the

cinema

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was 1997, mostly having attendees who were from 14 to 24 years old.

To begin

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, 62% of individuals went to the

cinema

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in 1996 with

the

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average

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visits

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visit

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of 10.3, accounting for the lowest

attendancy

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attendance

attendances

in the table.

In contrast

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, 72% of

visits

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was

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were

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recorded in 1997 (11.1 regular

visits

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), which was the same percentage as for those in 1998 and 2000, with 8,3 standard

visits

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in both years.

Additionally

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the beginning of the period, only 15% of visitors aged from 14 to 24 went to the movies, followed by just under 15% for

thoe

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those

who were younger than 35.

Similarly

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, the statistics

was

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were

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almost the same in 1998, with the least often

atendees

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attendees

who were over 35 and 50, at around 12% and slightly above 10, respectively. The peak rates of

attenancy

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attendance

were recorded in 1997 and 1999, with

the

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percentage higher than 15 for

the

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apply

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all age categories.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "additionally".

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Vocabulary: Replace the words visits, cinema with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.

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6
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meeting the goal of 7 or more
2
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
11
Grammar mistakes
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

208 words

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