60.The table and graph below show information about cinema visits in Auckland between 1995 and 2003. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

60.The table and graph below show information about cinema visits in Auckland between 1995 and 2003. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The table and graph illustrate the percentage of
visits
attending the
cinema
in Auckland, considering their ages from 1996 to 2000.
Overall
, the least amount of visitors went to the
cinema
at the start of the period,
whereas
the highest was in 1997, 1998, and 2000.
Additionally
, the most frequent year for watching movies at the
cinema
was 1997, mostly having attendees who were from 14 to 24 years old.
To begin
, 62% of individuals went to the
cinema
in 1996 with
the
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an
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average
visits
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visit
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of 10.3, accounting for the lowest
attendancy
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attendance
attendances
in the table.
In contrast
, 72% of
visits
was
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were
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recorded in 1997 (11.1 regular
visits
), which was the same percentage as for those in 1998 and 2000, with 8,3 standard
visits
in both years.
Additionally
,
in
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at
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the beginning of the period, only 15% of visitors aged from 14 to 24 went to the movies, followed by just under 15% for
thoe
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those
who were younger than 35.
Similarly
, the statistics
was
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were
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almost the same in 1998, with the least often
atendees
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attendees
who were over 35 and 50, at around 12% and slightly above 10, respectively. The peak rates of
attenancy
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attendance
were recorded in 1997 and 1999, with
the
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a
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percentage higher than 15 for
the
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apply
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all age categories.
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