Some people prefer to go to health clubs and gyms for health care, some say the walking and climbing stairs are more effective. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
In recent years, working out has been of much interest to the general public. Some assert that going to the
gym
can be beneficial for health
care. However
, others deem that running and climbing stairs in daily life are more effective instead
of going to the gym
in person
.
Some argue that working out at the gym
is a better way. Because there are usually professional trainers at the gym
, it has the advantage of being safe, and easy and learning how to exercise
and how to use exercise
equipment based on various knowledge. In addition
, it is true that it is difficult to learn the exact way to exercise
by yourself. Therefore
, there is a higher risk of injury if you exercise
alone, so going to the gym
and exercising with a trainer or exercise
professional is effective for keeping your health
. In addition
, if you go to the gym
and exercise
in person
, you are more likely to be motivated by watching other people exercise
and exercise
harder.
On the other hand
, others think that methods such
as walking, jumping, and going up and down stairs are more effective ways to exercise
in daily life. First,
it can reduce the cost compared to going to the gym
in person
. In addition
, people can freely access exercise
regardless of age, place, and time.
In conclusion, although
walking alone and exercising using stairs is easier and can reduce financial burden by simply exercising, going to the gym
in person
can improve your health
through safer and more accurate exercise
. I think people don't know how to exercise
effectively, easily, and accurately. Therefore
, I think you should go to a professional gym
or gym
with an expert to learn health
care.Submitted by gnlwnww on
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